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DarkAelfStudios's avatar

This unfurls with well measured beats - and ends without compromise. I love the backdrop and your antihero’s passage through it.

Eris Index's avatar

I just want to say, this had me really emotional and in my feelings. This is one of my favorite Substack reads.

I followed along with your character, and I felt so god damned bad for him. Your visuals were on point and amplified this even more.

The moment after the accident and every time this man chooses the little girl over addiction.. oh god.. my heart.

BEAUTIFUL write.

You made the creatures seem so real.

Loke Vreding's avatar

This comment will have me beaming through the day, if not the week. Thank you Eris, and glad you liked it!

Eris Index's avatar

You should submit this to the Writers' Club and join, from David T. E.? Unless you're already in it under a different name?

Loke Vreding's avatar

I am not, but I will consider it!

Eris Index's avatar

He schedules a story once a day at 7pm in its own channel, and we meet at 7pm eastern standard time, and say our fav lines, fav scenes, criticism, and questions, and overall comments. Picks one person to go at a time. He’s scheduled up to maybe Aug. first.

This would be an awesome one for that. And people who can’t get on at 7, go back whenever and leave their comments on it. He leaves the channel open for a long time.

Right now, I think it’s only around twenty or so people. Small, and just writing stuff. Different channels for promotion, an anime recommendation channel, lol.

On that day, we also restack and promote that particular story.

Loke Vreding's avatar

My first story ever published by a third party! I'm very proud of this one. My thanks to Nemesis Fiction for hosting it!